Elhoim
Iron Tower Studio
Kraken said:The first one looks wrong. First there's a general description of Feng, saying he's and old bastand, very greedy etc. Then in the next paragraph, he's a nice old man. It makes little sense. The player will obviously know they are getting fooled, and the character would have to be pretty dumb to first hear all these nasty things about him, and then just forget about all of it. What about different intros, or at least make it more neutral?
Perhaps instead of "what a friendly old man" it could say "He wasn´t such a bastard after all".
Unless the friendly old man was sarcasm...