Baldur's Gate Baldur's Gate: Siege of Dragonspear Pre-Release Thread

[Excidium II]

Male wizard portraits are p. redundant, everyone steals edwin's face.

 

[Excidium II]

OK, it's possible with email sharing to get a weblink to the articles:

http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038355
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038439
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038440
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038442
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038538
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038540
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038541
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038607
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038614
http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038729
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http://app.genwi.com/5.0/article/45777/105660/101038814

Corwin abandoned her bow and drew her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. He had a wild look in his eyes and his hair stood on end. Another knife flew from his fingers. Corwin launched herself forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. The bandit turned and tried to flee. She cut him down with a single stroke.

Good sword skills for an archer.

 

[hell bovine]

Male wizard portraits are p. redundant, everyone steals edwin's face.

Doesn't look like a wizard with that owl, more like a druid. I'm not sure what's the second one supposed to be, I thought she was holding a staff, but there is a string running next to it, so perhaps it's a bow.

 

[Irenaeus III]

Badass

 

[agris]

What is the difference between the difficulty settings? Is it just enemy numbers and stats, or does their behavior change too?

See here.

There's a bit more than that, but that's the crux of it.

So we can disable the additional damage from higher difficulty levels in SoD?

 

[LizardWizard]

Magazines are apps now.

Welcome to 2016, grandpa.
I think the last paper magazine I bought was 3 years ago or so...

Lmao if you were still buying paper magazines in the year 2013.

 

[Merlkir]

The portraits actually immitate the BG 1 style quite well. Impressed!

 

[Excidium II]

The portraits actually immitate the BG 1 style quite well. Impressed!

This one for one of the companions does it best:

 

[Kem0sabe]

Good sword skills for an archer.

That's a pretty shoddy piece of writing

 

[Echo Mirage]

Good sword skills for an archer.

That's a pretty shoddy piece of writing

Ok. Official codex competition. Lets see how can write a better scene based on the original text.

Corwin abandoned her bow and drew her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. He had a wild look in his eyes and his hair stood on end. Another knife flew from his fingers. Corwin launched herself forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. The bandit turned and tried to flee. She cut him down with a single stroke.

Corwin abandoned her bow. Flinging its broken limbs down into the mud. She drew her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. He had a wild look in his eyes and his hair stood on end. Another knife flew from his fingers. The pale moonlight catching its edge. Corwin launched herself low and forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. She winced as she felt its cold edge graze the backs of her fingers. The bandit turned on one foot and tried to flee. Pushing herself forwards she gripped her sword tighter, feeling the blood run between her wounded fingers. With her free hand she reached out, gripping the bandits hair tightly. She raised her sword up to meet him as he fell backward, slipping in the mud. Corwin heard him gasp. The air passing out of his lungs in one violent motion as she slid the blade under his ribs.

There, not great I admit. But a little better.

 

[Excidium II]

You doubled the word count with descriptions. Apply for PoE 2 writing asap because you're hired.

 

[ROARRR]

Good sword skills for an archer.

That's a pretty shoddy piece of writing

Original

Corwin abandoned her bow and drew her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. He had a wild look in his eyes and his hair stood on end. Another knife flew from his fingers. Corwin launched herself forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. The bandit turned and tried to flee. She cut him down with a single stroke.

MyVersion

Corwin abandoned her bow and unsheathed her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. The man had a wild look in his eyes. Another knife flew from his fingers. Corwin launched herself forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. Filled with panic the bandit turned and tried to flee in vain. She cut him down with a single unforgiving stroke.

Still not good but the point is this: The writing ain´t that bad it just needs a tweek here and there

 

[Namutree]

Good sword skills for an archer.

That's a pretty shoddy piece of writing

Original

Corwin abandoned her bow and drew her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. He had a wild look in his eyes and his hair stood on end. Another knife flew from his fingers. Corwin launched herself forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. The bandit turned and tried to flee. She cut him down with a single stroke.

MyVersion

Corwin abandoned her bow and unsheathed her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. The man had a wild look in his eyes. Another knife flew from his fingers. Corwin launched herself forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. Filled with panic the bandit turned and tried to flee in vain. She cut him down with a single unforgiving stroke.

Still not good but the point is this: The writing ain´t that bad it just needs a tweek here and there

Yeah, your version is better. The biggest issue though is that she's too proficient with her sword for being an archer, as pointed out previously.

 

[ROARRR]

Well, someone who has good reflexes and is pretty good at aiming is someone I could believe:

1. That he/she can see/feel where the bandit is aiming and how the flight path from the knife is

2. Taking 1. as granted she could be able to deflect that flying knife (critical hit)

3. It is assumed that the Enemy is turned his back to her, keeping himself defensless. Even an average sword skill should be enough to strike him down.

 

[hell bovine]

There is no fixing that description. It's too choppy, too much pointless repetition: Corwin this, knife thrower that. When you have already established that her name is Corwin, and that the bad guy is a knife-thrower, there is no point repeating that every second sentence, e.g.:

"She threw her bow the the side - not much use for it now - and drew her sword, raising to one knee. Waiting, watching; time measured by the heavy pulse beating in her throat. A sliver of light reflected of the dagger's edge and her body reacted first, slapping the knife away with her blade."

Something like that, except with better English, because I can't write properly in this language. Too many articles, ugh.

 

[ROARRR]

"She threw her bow the the side - not much use for it now - and drew her sword, raising to one knee. Waiting, watching; time measured by the heavy pulse beating in her throat. A sliver of light reflected of the dagger's edge and her body reacted first, slapping the knife away with her blade."

Feels like a wild west movie

 

[Namutree]

Well, someone who has good reflexes and is pretty good at aiming is someone I could believe:


2. Taking 1. as granted she could be able to deflect that flying knife (critical hit)

The way that it's written it implies she was able to accomplish this with skill, not luck. Her class as archer should make this feat practically impossible for her. If she gets a lucky critical, then it should have been written to imply that she got lucky. Establish that she wasn't expecting to be able to do that and couldn't do it on demand.

 

[Irenaeus III]

ITT lessons on writing D&D fiction

 

[Delterius]

50 shades of Doh'urden.

 

[Neanderthal]

Neanderthal version: Mary Sue kill bad man.

 

[Lhynn]

Corwin abandoned her bow and drew her sword as she rose to one knee. She waited, watching the knife-thrower. He had a wild look in his eyes and his hair stood on end. Another knife flew from his fingers. Corwin launched herself forward, slapping the knife away with her blade. The bandit turned and tried to flee. She cut him down with a single stroke.

Good sword skills for an archer.

She took 2 levels in monk.

 

[abnaxus]

Thread takes me back

http://www.rpgcodex.net/forums/index.php?threads/and-book-review-he-did.34976/page-11#post-924927

 

[Immortal]

Male wizard portraits are p. redundant, everyone steals edwin's face.

VentilatorOfDoom brofists this.

 

[pippin]

BG1 had the best portraits imo.
Many people say Viconia's portrait was improved in bg2 but those people are faggots who don't know anything.

A drow holding up a weapon of war, there are flames around her and apparently she loves the chaos. Badass.

A pic with somewhat fucked up proportions (the eyes and lips are crooked). Also, a traced pic of a pornstar. Double decline

 

[Irenaeus III]

Did she get a nose job?